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Let me show you the regurgitation
of the mother bird into open beaks,

the canine nose beyond the human range
that savors the rear of its companion,

the spider embracing the snared butterfly --
dancing partners on sticky musical strings --

or call attention to the feline purr
accompanying soprano squeals of its prey,

and the squirming delight a few days later
when maggots caper on bloated organs.

You can’t get past your judgments of “Grotesque!
Disgusting! Filthy! Creepy! Horrible!”

You are insensible to this beauty,
once having eaten the forbidden fruit.

Eden’s garden remains all around you,
invisible without full innocence.

The quickest way for me to learn something new is to first understand why I'd like to learn it.

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The following comments are for "EDEN IN THE EYE OF THE BEHOLDER"
by poeteye

Interesting take on Eden
Hi Poetseye,

The title ,itself, drawws the reader in with keen interest. Eden is an illusive concept and term. Paradise is in the eye of the beholder as you have so aptly shown here with unique details and a constancy in your perspective and theme. What I like about this poem is the way you show how the savage or raw side of nature and life has its own definition of beauty, a beauty in the perpetuation of species, habits and intricate
science of creation. Some people who accept traditional knowledge and never widen their imaginative range of ideas, can remain insensitive to the wonder of such things that are catalogued in your verse. Eden was not fated to be all innocence and bliss; but perhaps, a test of one's curiosity and one's need to explore beyond the boundaries -- whether safe or risky, beautiful or unsettling. I enjoyed this poem and found it quite provocative.

And also, I wish to thank you so much for commenting on my poem, "Silent Movie" I deeply appreciate your thoughtful comments. And yesterday, when posting the poem in experimental poetry, I was very tired and did not slide my slide bar down far enough under the category item to realize there is simply a poetry section. So this morning, I edited "Silent Movie" and moved it to the poetry region. I more of a traditionalist than experimental writer.

My best
Wendy (Gwendrina)

( Posted by: Gwendrina [Member] On: March 13, 2012 )

James...I have come back to this several times...and each time, it moves me more and more as I discover something I hadn't perceived before.

Beauty is indeed in the eye of the beholder...whether conventional beauty of face, figure etc., or of nature, savage though it may be at times.

While I love the sunshine and rainbows after, I am riveted by the crashing sound of a thunder storm, the dismal darkening of the sky,Flashing lightning as it streaks across the sky.

The sheer domination by Mother Nature! Who is to say that MAN is her greatest achievement!

Great write Jim.!


( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: March 15, 2012 )

(Blush) I didn't say stop
Thanks, Wendy and Bea. Wendy, your comment was very thoughtful also. I basked in its flattering nature. Bea, your praise was high indeed. Since my take on religious text often borders on the sacrilegious, to know that you came back to this several times and chose to focus on the best intent means a lot. I worry that I sometimes offend those of deeply held spiritual convictions. Thank you for seeing past what might be perceived as a low level of piety, to enjoy my take on traditional Biblical tales.

( Posted by: Poeteye [Member] On: March 18, 2012 )

Setting Eden on Fire
Smoke brings tears to my eyes...
As I watch my Eden burning

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: April 1, 2012 )

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