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In the mighty mornings of nature,
The cock heralds the crowing death
Of a fast fading, see-through moon,
As time has picked clean the remnants of dawn.
A new sun now burns the vapours
Of the heavens and earth's
Night tears of dew.
Watch the wisp of a wind
Cause the grasses to wave,
Like some onshore sea, as
My fertile valley, now rests
In a festival of light.
Rigid mountains cast their shadows,
As far as a dish of a lake.
It is here I stand, fearing nothing,
Save the impending blindness...

Of invisible night.


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The following comments are for "Mighty Mornings"
by ograd77

classic poetry
I always enjoy reading your poems because most of the time they are your take on slices of life. This is quite different from what I can recall of all the others I've read. It's almost like you've shifted gears and are traveling into the realm of classic poetry where the meaning is more obscure or metaphorical or whatever. This doesn't sound like you ... [don't think for a moment I think it's someone else's writing you've poached [I'm qualifying my comment because I've caused consternation in the past when I've made such an observation] I'm not going to say I prefer your other style of writing ... it's just more familiar to me as a benchmark of you.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: March 3, 2012 )

see-through moon
I loved this image! It pulled me into the poem. It's an image often seen on early mornings, but I can't recall anyone conveying it before. The poem does have a classical feel, as Pen said, but I would suggest replacing the second line with a visual image rather than the aural (besides it's a little hackneyed).

( Posted by: poeteye [Member] On: March 3, 2012 )

Mighty Mornings.
Beautifully said Ian...and yes...it reminds me of classic poems of old on nature...tasteful and vivid!

Nice work indeed!

Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: March 3, 2012 )

Pen
Yes Pen, there is a style change...most probable caused by changing my reading habits. Thanks for reading and leaving your kind comment. Ian

( Posted by: ograd77 [Member] On: March 4, 2012 )

Poeteye
Thanks for reading and leaving your kind comment. Ian

( Posted by: ograd77 [Member] On: March 4, 2012 )

Beatrice
Beatrice, thanks for your kind comment. Ian

( Posted by: ograd77 [Member] On: March 4, 2012 )





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