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Hello sunshine
And your wayward smile
Back we go
Back we go

10 miles, a second try
This time without fault or fortune

This weavers web is tied up well
Flowers, flies and apricots
Sweet bitter buzz

I\'m taking my everything
And keeping it close
Still, parts gone
Pasts forgotten
A dreamt magnitude
Shaking the waking
From their fog and bed

I hope you didn\'t forget this form
And the wonder that I am
This world is mine
This world I build
This world I let you live in

Sing me your cool cool apathy

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The following comments are for "Carriage Return"
by rancidsauce

that last line
saved the whole poem for me and made me believe one could write another one based on it.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: October 31, 2011 )

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