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clap clap

put the thriller down
in your head
a fo' sho' shot

spit
bad bones
the other guy's drones

clap clap

tagging
like crash test dummies

clap clap

external validation
disambiguation

clap clap

clap clap

under suspicion
of intended sense

surveil the chaos
out
over the fence

clap clap

clap clap

the other guy's drones
spitting bad bones

clap clap

artificiality
today's reality

clap clap

the other guy's drones

clap clap

clap clap

spit




1 October 2011

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below the subliminal
deep within manipulation
that's where tr^th resides

2 Dec 2011






























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The following comments are for "g"
by Bobby7L

out of step
Hey padrone - this one word "disambiguation" seems slightly out of place. My mind went, immediately, to 'disfiguration' and I had to correct myself.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: October 18, 2011 )

clap clap
Penelope,
of process..

on one level: through our representations..there is "external validation" [as at a writer's site].

"disambiguation" may or may not follow, as communication isn't always followed by understanding..or even intended:

"under suspicion
of intended sense"

Slingin' slang..changing meanings..

"clap clap"..like of hands, releasing birds to warn others..

or gunshots.."tagging"..

we sling our words





( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 18, 2011 )

clap, clap!
Let the birds fly! enjoyed Bobby...

( Posted by: cmsmuse [Member] On: October 18, 2011 )

Crash Test Poet
It is the Golden Drone
That sets the tone...
And slays the ambiguous dragon
It goes something like rat-a-tat-tat

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: October 18, 2011 )

spitting bad bones
Tina,
on point..
thanks

wf,
"tagging/like crash test dummies"..on one level, a facebook reference

spit

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 18, 2011 )

Experimental
Bobby, I don't know, I just do not know. I have read this at least 10 times, twice out loud and it had something going as I heard it. I am also going to record it this morning, and why all the fuss? Because I am anxious to find something in and out of it.

I have to be honest, I just don't get it. The one thing that makes sense to me is your mention of today's reality, am I getting warm?

That and "rat-a-tat-tat" maybe you could add some "rat-a-tat-tat" to it a couple places or something. Now that would work for me.

( Posted by: veebdosa [Member] On: October 19, 2011 )

"That's the fact, Jack."
Ronnie,
of cadence..a drive-by joint/offering..

I've manipulated some slang..and made some:

"the other guy's drones"

Have you ever heard a rap-off?

"spit"- as in recite, have at it..







( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 19, 2011 )





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