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When butterflies from Hell
Take flight...
On vellum wings
Fiery bright...
They fan the flame within my Soul
And flicker my delight

� G.Dean Stevens

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The following comments are for "Butterflies From Hell"
by awhippingflame

Wish I didn't have to point out a spelling error - firey ... fiery. I've tripped over that mistake myself a couple of times but was always put straight by spell check.

Now that I've dealt with that ... this is a fabulous poem! What I really liked was 'vellum wings'. Did you know vellum originally was made from 'the skin of a calf'?

You also scored huge points with me because your final line is such a kicker!

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: October 10, 2011 )

well being poets, none of us smell too good around here.

( Posted by: veebdosa [Member] On: October 10, 2011 )

Skin of a Calf
I never thought to check the spelling of that word because it looked so it looks so wrong. I'll correct that right away. And thanks for your fabulous comments.

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: October 10, 2011 )

There's Poo on My Shoe Too
Well that's not true Ron...your piece entitled "Artist" is no stinker. It's a work of art. I read it often. But now that I have your attention via my attention grabbing subject line...every poem posted on this network deserves comment. It just doesn't happen enough. If you read it...acknowledge it...that's all.

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: October 10, 2011 )

those wings "whip" me to fright!

( Posted by: damifino [Member] On: October 13, 2011 )

I came back here to check on your response as I'm wont to do and of course .. being a reader .. I read your poem again and ... holy hannah!

If you don't know me by now and there's no earthly reason why you should ... I am a rampant rhymer ... I kinda like alliteration too ... heh heh ....

I never caught your rhyme sequence until just now! That's an excellent skill to be so effortless with a rhyme that even a sharp eyed rhyming fool misses it .. or maybe my mind was somewhere else? Nope ... not at all. Take another bow!

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: October 14, 2011 )

Butterflies from Hell
Great title and image. I enjoyed the read.

( Posted by: poeteye [Member] On: March 26, 2012 )

RE: Butterflies From Hell
An enjoyable piece; loved the visual imagery and playful flow; my only complaint is that it left me wanting m-o-r-e; wonderfully written and conceived.

-Joe Breunig,
Reaching Towards His Unbounded Glory

( Posted by: jjbreunig3 [Member] On: May 23, 2013 )


outstanding.... in full agreement with pen. a poetic master piece.

my warmest

( Posted by: TheRedCockroach [Member] On: November 6, 2014 )

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