Your eyes
by arkaleel (Member) - published: June 30, 2003
Word Count: 21 Word Bytes: 114 Viewed: 445 times
Category - Haiku
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Truly my hand will meet yours
And yours will meet mine
In the future as we drift off in time

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AbdelSalam Kaleel

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The following comments are for "Your eyes"
by arkaleel

filing?
Perhaps this poem should be posted in the Poetry section rather than the Haiku. Haiku have a structured syllable count that you have not followed. You have the correct number of lines, and the correct general idea, but the syllable count is 5-7-5 for traditional haiku.

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: July 1, 2003 )

I agree
Yes, I did not label it as a haiku. It must have been done so by a mistake due to the 3 lines. But thank you for noticing that.

( Posted by: arkaleel [Member] On: July 3, 2003 )

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