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9/11 - We Will Never Forget! (Tanka)

Unbelievably
The mighty towers crumbled
Grieving loved ones prayed
That God had spared their loved ones
While victims jumped from windows!

Copyright2011 Beatrice Boyle
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Grandma Bea


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The following comments are for "9/11 - We Will Never Forget (Tanka)"
by Beatrice Boyle

Let It Go
Nice 10 or even 9 years ago, but it is sort of unbleivable that now, 10 years later, because of the powers that be, we will just not let them go.

Some of us will forget, and indeed have forgotten, as we should. Let them go to Heaven, we cannot shut them out because of our own needs that can never be fulfilled. It is over. Done.

Leave them to Heaven.

( Posted by: veebdosa [Member] On: September 12, 2011 )

Oh No Veeb!!!
Tell that to the families of those victims/heroes Veeb...I don't think they would agree with you!

And NO...we should NEVER forget...it could very well happen again tomorrow, but on an even larger scale...we should never be driven to complacency, so that we will be victims again!!!

Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: September 14, 2011 )

Got another dime? They want it.
Well, I have to disagree. Bob Beckell said it right on
TV last week, we are sick of the crybaby attitude coming out of 911, we are sick of what the politicians have done to our country using 911 as a springboard for their disgraceful milking it of every dime they can get out of it.

We have alreasdy lost, and it will take much time to restore sanity, we have to let it go. Just my opinion, but it is getting more popular every day.

We tell ourselves to forget and get over every other major issue in our lives, and this is no different. Meanwhile, the userers are using it to the very last dime to be found, and we just let them.

( Posted by: veebdosa [Member] On: September 14, 2011 )

9-11
Bea,

The content of this piece should not be the focus, but the writing itself. Content is the prerogative of the writer. (My own opinions of the subject may surprise you, but for this website they are irrelevant.)

Lit is supposed to be about the writing, so I'll stick with that.

I'm no expert on the Haiku, but isn't it supposed to be 5/7/5? Is there an exception that I don't know about?

Other than that, I feel your memory of the date in question. You've done a great job of conveying your emotion here. Kudos!

Dave

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: September 18, 2011 )

It's a Tanka Dave!
Hi Dave...you are correct..5/7/5 for a haiku. This is a Tanka...another haiku form with the sylabbles 5/7/5/7/7.

Just trying to branch out a little!! lol

Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: September 18, 2011 )





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