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I'm going through some changes,
Like a river over time.
Crooked are now what were straitways,
My depths unsublime.
I've come down this path way too far-
From boulders,stones,to pebbled rock-
Been pushed around and broken down
From what was solid stock.
Now I'm but a grain of sand
Washed up on twised beach.
The mountain top I used to be
Forever out of reach.

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The following comments are for "Unholy Roller"
by damifino

The Good The Bad and the Unsublime
I cannot imagine a World without Tahiti...
And beaches that possess no sand

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: August 23, 2011 )

RE: Unholy Roller
Loved the title and concept of this piece; a very poetic description of rock erosion; wonderfully written. --Joe

( Posted by: jjbreunig3 [Member] On: August 23, 2011 )

solid stock
Excellent work! You're not broken down, you've just become Dam Fine.

Twisted has two "t"s

( Posted by: Poeteye [Member] On: August 23, 2011 )

Sand Struck
Thanks,awhippingflame,I feel better now...Hot,gritty,far away...

( Posted by: damifino [Member] On: August 23, 2011 )

Like a...
I see you enjoy the use of simile too!lol
Thanks you Joe

( Posted by: damifino [Member] On: August 23, 2011 )

Dam Cracks
But they are being repaired!
Thanks poeteye.

( Posted by: damifino [Member] On: August 23, 2011 )

if u dont have an avatar dont commet! writers at work here!

( Posted by: PAPALAS [Member] On: August 24, 2011 )

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