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Victoria could not believe the predicament she had gotten herself into. All she wanted to do was find a quiet secluded place to take a pee since the ladies bathroom in the Walmart was overflowing with a Ladies in Wheelchairs chapter from Hoboken. Who would have thought she would encounter wolves less than one-hundred feet behind the store? She had her smock on and her name tag, but that would be all they would find of her if she didn't get back fast to the rear of the store. The wolves looked ravenous, but had fixated on her bloomers pulled down around her ankles. It was so difficult to hold it in and walk with her legs crossed at the same time. All she could do was look the canines in the eye and pray that she wouldn't fall over the underbrush of the forest floor. She crept ever closer to the edge of the forest towards the paved lot and finally felt the edge of the asphalt. The wolves should have shied away but they were so intent on her Where's Waldo bloomers bought from an Eddie Bauer store in the mall down the road, she thought she just might make it. No one was in sight as she gingerly crossed the lot, still needing to pee so bad her bladder hurt. Now the wolves crossed the lot and backed her up to the block wall of the Walmart. She was also among several pallets of stock waiting for stockpersons to bring in the store. One of the pallets caught her eye for a second and she realized it was canned dog food. Alpo, to be exact.
She reached underneath the plastic wrap and tore loose a six-pack and with her name tag, flipped open the flip-top cans, first one, then another and another, carefully rolling them towards the saliva dripping jaws of the wolves. They took up the smell of the dog food and began to eat as the cans rolled further and further away on the pavement. Victoria got to the back door a few feet away and opened it enough to squeeze in as the wolves dined on the Alpo.


She got to the bathroom to an empty stall and sat sweating, relieved. Really relieved. She never saw the wolves again, and never smoked another fatty. Ever.


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The following comments are for "Can You? Lower Prices at Walmart"
by williamhill

funny!
Hi,
I liked your creative and humorous solution to the Can You? Challenge. I didn't know Where's Waldo bloomers were available at Eddie Bauer. I'll have to look into that. lol

In answer to Did he? I say yes, you solved the conflict very well!

Sandra

( Posted by: sandra [Member] On: August 19, 2011 )

2 P's!
Jeez Charlie I came to take a gander and you've had the same urge! My flash is in the hopper and while mine has a nature call too it's not similar in any other capacity. Loved where you went with this. I thought Walmart staff had their own WCs. Course I've never asked them cause that might be unseemly.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: August 20, 2011 )

Williams Can You?
Very funny! You took in a direction I never expected. That's what I love about this challenge, I get to see the different pictures of my scene's in other writers heads...(did that make sense? It did in my head anyway.)

So my answer to the question Did he? Yes you did. Great work! You're entry will be highlighted in this month's Majestic in my column Musings.

Kudos!

Dave

P.S.
I apologize for how long it's taken me to come and check out your work. I've been dealing with some medical issues and they've kept me laid up longer than I expected. Thank you for playing along and I hope you enjoyed the game.

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: August 30, 2011 )





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