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Take this confusion by the mind
a self-inflicted lack
nurtured knowledge compromised
for enduring physical necessity
slowed enough to understand
ignorance rules my life
in need of patient teaching
to break through false learning
and quench a thirst to know.

Take this hollow by the heart
peace and joy inspired beats
for me, for you
turning cold like stone
a will dying
halting thumping efforts
bleeding tears of shame
for apathy clotted caring
and a life meant for giving.

Take this yearning by the womb
deluge anointing like summer rain
warm and cleansing
fiercely fueled passion
kept alive by imagination
held sacred since
sweetness dreamed of tingling kisses
grown to heaving breaths
exploring flesh and fantasy.

Take this conflict by the hand
hold tight as faith spirals into fear
past influenced disbelief, determined
like my need for certainty
and far stronger than I
guide me through doors
kept cautiously closed
peaked in by curiosities
slammed shut by pain.


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The following comments are for "Take Me"
by LilyAnn

Well-Done
You sear my brain
With your "fiercely fueled passion"

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: August 18, 2011 )

"peaked in.."..?
interesting choice..

Welcome to the forum.

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: August 18, 2011 )

Powerful stuff Lily!
Hi Lily Ann...Welcome to Lit...you're going to love it here...and by virtue of the above...we love you already!!

Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: August 18, 2011 )

Thanks x 3
awhippingflame... thank you very much. A fiery compliment, indeed. ;)

Bobby7L... I hope that means it was a good one? Thank you.

Ah, aunt Bea... I have missed you so. I'm ok with you referring to me by my name. As I stated in my pm, I only created this profile under my diseased mother's name to keep under the radar from unkind ones I see are no longer here and because I wanted open minded opinions on my current writing which I feel has grown quite a bit. Like I told you on FB, I created this profile a very long time ago but could never remember my log-in info. Perhaps it is fate that it just popped back in my head the other day, huh? To be able to come back here where I first began posting online and leave better than I began. I owe an awful lot of my growth in writing to all of you. Have you seen Shannon around? I've sent him a few emails but as I understand he was having trouble with his at one time so he may not have gotten them. I would love to talk to him. I hope to be around for a while. Thank you, with all my heart. I love you to, sweet friend.

Tammy


( Posted by: LilyAnn [Member] On: August 19, 2011 )

I, too, miss Shannon
But lit.org has you back and is all the richer for it. My favorite lines from this:
Never mind, I could list two or three from each stanza -- some for concept, some for figure of speech and some just for simple clarity.
Let me say instead that I recognize the truth of this poem, that it comes from the heart and that it has a pleasing structure that gives it a reflective symmetry.

( Posted by: Poeteye [Member] On: August 20, 2011 )





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