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sunset fill
the flamingo pink sky
with birds of paradise
i am mesmerized
so beautiful
through your kissing eyes
it's all i can think of
all i can see

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The following comments are for "Through Your Kissing Eyes"
by FireFly747

Who Owns the Sunrise...?
The sunset belongs to all of us...
The sky is a different story...

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: August 18, 2011 )

You are:

If there's no comma following "sunset"- it would be: "sunset 'fills'"

"is all"..?- Did you mean "'it's' all.."


( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: August 18, 2011 )

You are "mesmerized"
sorry..editing is our friend.

"i am mesmerized"

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: August 18, 2011 )

rocked it
u rock...i suck at editing too...emotions dont see caps or proof raiding...oops

( Posted by: PAPALAS [Member] On: August 24, 2011 )

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