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Her love is a blue rose
Floating on the Dead sea
Then taken by a handsome
Brown rose
Down into the pit
Of dispair
Where two doves
Wanted to be free
But were swallowed
By sorrow and
Coughed up in a crater
Along with a black rose
Smirking at the green rose
Weeping in the shadows.

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The following comments are for "Her love is a blue rose"
by Michaelpatrick

more good stuff
let's see if I can spell dispair without looking it up ..

despair ... YES! I've tripped over this word more times than enough! Hope you didn't catch it from me.

Now .. the colour of these roses ... they're interesting ... made me think about a classic love poem with a rose reference. Happily ... you don't even go there .. you go off on a .. um .. sort of psychedelic sundae .. [had to look up the spelling of psychedelic]

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: April 28, 2012 )

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