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The brushed softness
The children's laughter
All embodied in a copper gleam
Deep in the metropolis of the thick rushes
Hiding where it can be seen

Art thou hope, sly one?
Thy rustic games of hide an' kill
Of terror, wit, and will;
Profit we to imitate-
To dance 'ere we masticate?


Upon the pregnant prairie,
Along the green-ocean shores,
As a young lad whittles,
So a young pup hunts;
Iridiescent, flying charms
And long naked

Slinking bodies cross th'path,
A scandaroon squawks into thy gizzard held high,
Nary ten paces 'hind our chickens.
Lying, cheating scoundrel-thief,
Scourge of o' th'gentleman's thumb


Daring vixen hear the cry
Of rising, rutting sun
For sunlight dies with the sillhouette
Of bird, beast, and hun.

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"Many people hear voices when no-one is there. Some of them are called mad and are shut up in rooms where they stare at the walls all day. Others are called writers and they do pretty much the same thing." -Margaret Chittenden


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The following comments are for "Alden Err"
by Araxie

Thanks!
I like using the italic with the straightforward to convey two different voices...though perhaps I should find/learn something else to play with.

Twenty more points if you can decipher the title? =)

( Posted by: Araxie [Member] On: July 24, 2003 )





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