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as people come and go,
the horned fox plays his sax
his ragged tail by his ragged black hat
filled with dollars or dimes
the horned fox plays his sax

morningtime
as children go by
on their way to school
rosy dimples
and sweaters of wool,
the horned fox plays his sax

afternoons,
while the men
are in the factory
dazed or absorbed in
the perpetual struggle
of gear against gear
and dollar against dollar,
the horned fox plays his sax

nightimes,
when the moon instructs
lovers in their vital lessons
and murky absinthe
runs down the storm drains,
the horned fox plays his sax

he plays the blues
he plays the blacks;
he plays the rainbow on his sax

it's what he knows:
the ale and the wail,
the stops and goes,
the one thing he always did right


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The following comments are for "the horned fox plays his sax"
by seanspacey

the winded fox
single-reeded
conical-bored

the aerophoned fox..

a blue oool read.

Blow on

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: July 15, 2011 )

Your Stuff
is really good. I followed Bobby here. He has goo taste.
I hav e read some of your stuff, just not enuff. Sorry.
I'll see more as time permits.

williamhill

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: July 15, 2011 )

Vulpine vox pop
I like this because it is beatsy and bluesy, and because it resonates with my abiding affection for the vast, strange underworld of subway buskers in London's vast, strange networks of Victorian subway tunnels. (I despise the tube: the buskers are the one saving grace of it.)

The last line seems a bit weak, to me? If I was restructuring this, I'd repeat the closing refrain after every couple of stanzas, to reinforce the musical atmosphere, and then... well, I'd find a way of rephrasing that last line. The import is fine, but the actual words seem flat: it's letting down the poem's considerable cool.

( Posted by: mobiussoul [Member] On: July 19, 2011 )

Fox Sax
Wonderful! I hear it as a song!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: July 19, 2011 )





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