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Ask the loud doors
The angry floors
I searched for water
To pour over the
fire.

All I found was
A glass half full
In the process
Of reversible
change.


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The following comments are for "A glass half full."
by Michaelpatrick

Not quite reversed
I was curious about the 'period' in the title of the piece

I'm not sure I'd want to extinguish the fires of life- in my case, anyway. I like the idea here. Its a good start.

Thanks for sharing.

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: July 10, 2011 )

A glass half full
I's about a couple fighting.He's trying to find a way to stop the heated arguments and she being the glass half full is growing cold.About the period,i dont knou why i put that there.There should'nt be a period at the end of a piece?I'm kinda new at this.Thank you for your comment

( Posted by: michaelpatrick [Member] On: July 10, 2011 )

Not over til it's empty
I like the sentiment in this. The poem hinges on the word 'reversible': on the hope implied by that.

The period in the title doesn't bother me. I'm not sure the 5th-line linebreaks help, though - I might make it 4/4, if it was mine.

( Posted by: mobiussoul [Member] On: July 19, 2011 )

A glass half full
Thank you mobiussoul.

( Posted by: michaelpatrick [Member] On: July 20, 2011 )

Don't Be a Loud Door
Change often comes...
amid loud doors and angry floors

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: May 28, 2015 )





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