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The poem version of a song I had written years ago.

There is no room for dreaming
Mist caressing your wild ways
Your hair flows like the gift of spring
Winding down melancholy days

We are beset with dire opinions
Topped wild old rust and rage
We have forgot the reasons for living
As history turns another page

We died down by the river
We fought there chilled to the bone
Im afraid you wont find me there
Carrying the light back home

We fight for what we deem as honor
But we do our dieing all alone

My ladies you were a giving sort
And our men were singular true
But the sin of revenge set in
Now we justify all that we do

We give up even our children
We lament in our grand halls
We forfeit the gifts of living
And underhill we grieve for it all

So we die by every river
We still fight chilled to the bone
Im afraid you wont find me there
Carrying the light back home

We fight for what we deem as honor
But we do our dieing all alone

In our grief we became much smaller
In time well all just disappear
Gone from the living light of day
Our lives forgotten but still held dear

Put out then a filled goblet
Before you retire to your bed
A blessing to those who remember
Our beliefs unwritten like us are dead

We died down by that river
Topped wild old rust and rage
Underhill we hide from it all
And history turns another page

version Ken Lehnig 2011





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Why is doing what you love the hardest thing to do? Is it because failing what you thought defined you would be too devastating a thing from which to recover? If so, we stay where mere accident has left us.


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The following comments are for "Underhill (version)"
by jonpenny

..down by the river
Ken,
Enjoyed here, as elsewhere- just wanted to let you know.

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: July 7, 2011 )

underhill
Thanks Robert. Much appreciated.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: July 9, 2011 )

Indeed
Same here, Ken. Good stuff.

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: July 10, 2011 )

2 Abel Underhill
Sorry I'm so late responding. Thank you my friend.
Thank you Chapter 1 for the numerical acknowledgment.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: July 16, 2011 )





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