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Assaulted by an errant wind
Skirts flapping
Like wings or the
Corn-starched sheets
Lolek used to
wash Saturday mornings
on the sun-kissed porch
Whoopsy daisy
Order is broken
Crusty-brown leaves
Swirl and run in
Tiny mincing steps
Sparrows aquiver &
huddle under the awnings
Everything participates
in a well-choreographed

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The following comments are for "Whoopsy-daisy!"
by Shakti

Sou les vous les soo Hed em up Cowboys MOVE EM OUT
I shoulda knowed when you slipped in them texas kiddee phrases into a French reading defination of the Saturday morning bath on the balcony that this was more than just your average Manila poem. Near impossible to distinguish it from happening in Manila, or Paris, or maybe even a southwest facing apartment balcony in El Paso Texas as a rapidly approaching tornado crosses the Rio Grande headeed her way.

Look out Saturday night, her comes clean body Maria to a Cantina night of fun and hoopla????

I thought I knew every single word of your well crafted hygenic poem until the very last word, and had to look it up because I am not a ballet fan, and was slightly disappointed that when I clicked on the search definition, to saee a fa... I mean a guy perforeming a Pirouette, is dissapointed the right word?

Oh well, indeed I like this poem a whole lot. Good work. Wasn't there a Maria or some such once associated with your name?

Ronnie aka veebdosa

( Posted by: veebdosa [Member] On: June 18, 2011 )

Leaves My Tongue Flapping in the Wind
Those sudden winds of whoopsy-daisy are my favorite...
Can cause a man's mind to do pirouettes

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: June 19, 2011 )

Veebdosa and whippingflame,

thanks for the comments. I dont know of any Maria but I love that name. I just like the teasing mellifluous sound of "pirouette" and it is as succint and playful as an errant wind.

( Posted by: Shakti [Member] On: June 20, 2011 )

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