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Light transcribes immutable
Lazarus bound in circles
as we flash like fireflies
extinct by the August moon.

Watch the black hole eat her
sister as a galaxy explodes
filling our dirty lenses with
more then they can hold.

Yet oafs still juggle numbers
with the rules that have grown
to explain a rain drop while
the clouds drift by unknown.

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