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I'm sitting here on the pavement
under the eternal, grey rain...
...drops of blind illusions...
I'm tired of searching my future in puddles,
seeing myself transforming
and telling me, with mercy:
"Child, search for your future elsewhere
search for Paradise elsewhere"
But all streets look the same
and I don't know who I am anymore:
the sad harlequin, with a grin painted on his face,
the anguished Barbie-doll with paper-thin shoulders,
or maybe that nameless danger
hidden inside all of my masks,
in which I've lost myself
searching a cardboard Paradise

------
Stille


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The following comments are for "Lost"
by Dew Of Blood

nice
very nicely done mate!im not much of a critic though, but i still can express my admiration.
by the way, if youre interested in submiting something to our webzine, drop me a line: northerain@yahoo.com

( Posted by: northerain [Member] On: July 8, 2003 )

nice
very nice piece, enjoyed every word.
Deep subject, being lost is frightning to everyone. best wishes to you

( Posted by: puck [Member] On: August 25, 2003 )

LOST
This is a tasty bit of poetry. Another fine meditation. Very moving. Ah, Paradise lost!

I accidentally ran across one of your poems in Random Reader and had to read some more. This is REAL poetry. Thanx.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: September 28, 2003 )

Agree with..
above because it was on random reader that i found this and I'm really glad that I did because of the fact that most of the work i go through i will read it and post little bit about but i love how somber and true this really is. It makes the heart wrench and makes for a good poem.

( Posted by: ryangilr0y [Member] On: March 19, 2005 )





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