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it tastes so good
like capitalist nirvana,
swishing it around
like a pretty one-night stand,
but it comes in a box
on-demand
without the long wait
under a Bodhii tree

the trouble is:
it doesn't last,
like a quick cigarette
the thing is past.
so rather than let
the pleasure sink,
one might say that
I chain-drink

a bad habit
is what you might see,
but there's a reason
the world's free.
see, I walk around
like a broken machine,
and no matter what I do
the pain won't leave
my circuits

So it's cola rain
on the desert floor
softening the suffering
making way for Spring


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The following comments are for "a cola poem"
by seanspacey

cola drinks
For me the poem is first two stanzas. After that it seems to turn in direction, the theme is....?

I would say 2nd stanza holds the theme here.

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: June 11, 2011 )

Cola rain
Sean, I've read some of your other poems and I'm not so sure I'm convinced its to soften the suffering as much as to quench the cotton mouth ;). I particularly liked the last stanza.

( Posted by: JackGrady [Member] On: June 11, 2011 )

thanks
thank you both for the read and your perspectives. - Sean

( Posted by: seanspacey [Member] On: June 12, 2011 )





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