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Ken gave us a poem challenge in this months "Ramblings of a Vagabond Poet" over at Majestic. I thought I'd give it a go. Enjoy!



thwarted expectations
broken and not intended

an act in my lifeís circus
my costume the only
new
thing

i climbed into the cannon
the crowd goes wild
new love and hope
only
needing
a spark

lots of smoke
but no explosion
bad
primer

laughter from the bandstand
iím not the main event
just a loved
starved
clown

playing the
same scene
over
again


------
'But I don't want to go among mad people,' said Alice. 'Oh, you can't help that,' said the cat. 'We're all mad here.'
Lewis Carroll



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The following comments are for "Ken's Poem Challenge"
by HeRoCoMpLeX

Kudo's Dave!
Kudo's Dave! This was great...see what happens when you listen to your elders? (Sorry Johnpenny!)

I will come back to this one again!
Wecome back!

Bea













( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: June 5, 2011 )

Aunt Bea
Where did I go? Welcome back to the poetry world maybe? Ahh, yes, I've had a long break from my poetic side but tonight I'm feeling it so stay tuned...

Thanks for the read!

Dave

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: June 5, 2011 )

poetry challenge
Dave,

good twist on Ken's offer. I will post my effort separately, don't want to hang on your coat tails in this thread, but I see you have kept mostly in line with Ken's example. Hopefully mine will not be too far off.

My post will be up in a couple days.

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: June 5, 2011 )

My Challenge
Thanks for reading Brian. I've been way off my poetry lately but I am starting to get the itch. I hope this will open a door for me to get back into it.

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: June 7, 2011 )

works for me
I too was on a creative vacation for about a year or more. I think it does help to read what others write, keeping open mind. Inspiration comes from anywhere if we pay attention.

I've been reading an old creative writing text book from years ago, and darn if it doesn't open my "writer's eyes" every time.

Keep readin', writin' and critquin', is what its all about.

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: June 8, 2011 )

Dave/poetry challenge
I like this for the different take but also for the freestyle cadnce and form. I'm thrilled you have found your inner poet again. We will see more - yes?

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: June 11, 2011 )

@Ken
I hope so...

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: June 12, 2011 )





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