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we will live the rest of our lives strapped to a screen---vibrating to the sounds of speakers
at the edge of both ears, wandering in vast amounts of blocks amongst the virtual forest
which we will have created with our absolutely insane mindís eye, now magnified---with a brand new world where we alone are masters of our own reality & nothing can stop us but a power outage.

while we in the first world are kicking back and drinking mai-taiís, swaggering in our simulated paradises, those in the 3rd are sweltering, suffering, and dehydrating because the water which they so desperately need as human beings has been stolen by companies now selling it to us, here, in our carcinogenic plastic bottles---so while we die slow cancer deaths, they dwell in a day to day chaos of instability & anarchy brought on by warring factions who are killing one another for the pathetic attempt at control of what little we have left there after raping their land repeatedly---without rest.

the blood in our veins will soon become electric, as the cells become replaced by nano-technology which eliminates the need for actual cells, giving us microchips instead, which will eliminate all the once destructive factors within---leaving us immortal in a sense---we will be hooked to the motherboard, with no way to discern between the internet which is now the outernet, as there will no longer be any difference between that which is physical & that which is virtual.

while the electric blood flows within us, we will conjure up perfect worlds---our little utopias, specific to our own wants an needs, will of course cost us---those of us who have gained the income on the outside in order to vanish into the matrix will be able to do so---we will no doubt be able to remove ourselves physically from this decaying existence, whether we go underground or whether we are guarded within highly weaponized units which will be there solely for the protection of our perpetual electric bliss (as long as our bank accounts provide).

in this unity of man & machine, in the electric pool---we will learn that if we can continue to swim through our lucid creations, we will only have to fear the depletion of our accounts---and those rif-raff on the outside who are angry because they are starving & dehydrating while killing off each other for the last remnants of natural resources that were not stolen by us who prior to this techno-unified revolution, held all the cards which took the form of nuclear & biological weapons.

as angry as they get, our own private worlds of bliss will no longer have any place for barbarians of any kind---all our personal empires will suffer no sacks---we will dwell in the house of ourselves forever & attain perfection through the physical, electrical, technological & finally completely virtual & simulated pure, unadulterated selfishness.

this is what is coming for those that have the moola---and for us who dwell without, nothing will really change, except for our inability to gain any kind of leg up on the process. think about it, the ceoís of the companies that control our lives---their pictures, for the most part do not decorate the billboards. you know only a handful of who they are by the indentification of their faces. instead we are left blind to the doings of these corporate criminals & they are only biding time before they can be rid of us completely.

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The following comments are for "electric blood"
by delapruch

You'd be surprised how much I agree with what your saying here. However, please allow me a few humble notes.

This feels more a like a personal rant than a short story. The imagery is solid and I'm definitly picking up what your throwing down, but I'm not sure what the story is here.

Don't mistake me, I really like it and as I've told you before, I'm a big fan of yours. I just think that perhaps you've posted this in the wrong genre.

Please take my comments in the spirit they are intended; just the friendly observations of one writer to another. Feel free to completely disregard. After all, its your story, write it how you want to. ;)

Much Love,


( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: June 5, 2011 )

@ HeRoCoMpLeX.

Hey Dave, firstly, no worries---I feel that you have been supportive in the past and therefore I don't see anything harsh being done here! I am glad you liked the piece, overall, and that you felt the need to comment. I don't separate pieces by topic when I write them---I find it very to be a waste of time for the writer, and really a waste of time for the reader. A reader should invest their own time, if that is what they are set out to do, in deciding for themselves what they can draw from a piece. This piece takes the form of a short story, as far as I am concerned. I feel that time spent debating the form of a piece takes away from time that could be spent thinking about the substance of a piece or perhaps, going on to read another piece by another writer! Remember that we are grains of sand in this short short life---with so much in the world that is beautiful and interesting, we need to consume everything that we can, no? I just find all this modernist filing of things into little boxes to be silly, at best. Determination of a piece's worth is relative. What one reader considers a story, another considers a rant, as if a rant isn't a story? And some say that novels, stories take poetic form...does that mean they are more poetry than prose? Who cares.

( Posted by: delapruch [Member] On: June 5, 2011 )

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