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I wrote a hundred lines
for a singularity
a paean to 33 scintillant moons
swelling forth from
the perfect slant
of your golden neck
You invade islands
& permeate
spaces in-between
this day and that
You are a crowd
Livid pathos
You are
the rancorous sunset
that spill
a sort of mad pulchritude
Your ululation
stitch the afternoon
in spots of canary-yellow

I wait for the hang-nail moon
as you discard yet another pip...



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The following comments are for "The muse"
by Shakti

the coyote song
I get too many disconects from logic because of the lines....

a sort of mad pulchritude
Your ululation


Mostly because I simply cannot accept any reality of the connotations of thw words PULCHRITUDE and ULULATION...
the one I think, pul..... depicting any beauty in connection with the failure of your Muse (Should always be capitolized or the Muse in question gets very angry and puts yoou into Writers Block for a moon or longer) Ask Bobby he has been in Writers Block for 13 years I hear) Anyway, ululation, I love the sound, not limited to Asia and Africa, but I recall it vividely as a child coming for a den of coyotes near our farmhouse as a steam engine train moved over their den under a railroad track brigde, this poem really depicts the nature of the sound here, as well as from an African dingo or nilly dog. A very haunting sound from all, but the word itself just does not do it justice, is my premise. However, since I cannot suggest at the moment a more appropriate word Again, a pretty good poem,and was worth reading twice.

Since I cannot suggest a better sounding word than Ululationary, then I am forced to bow to your will of selection, even though it gives me a little bumpy feeling, ho ho, I wear shock absorbers and can handle it.

( Posted by: veebdosa [Member] On: May 31, 2011 )

a muse
As formed and represented, I read as, "spills" and "stitches"..

When referencing one of the daughters of Mnemosyne and Zeus, you would employ cap: Muse

When referencing a guiding spirit or inspiration, or when in thought, it's "muse"..

experience enjoyed

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: May 31, 2011 )

disconnect
perhaps the tone of disconnect was the message and the cognitive dissonance that i experience was sth you felt...the "muse" was certainly just a muse when i wrote this...and perhaps quite an understatement...

( Posted by: Shakti [Member] On: May 31, 2011 )

just a muse
you got it

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: May 31, 2011 )





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