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I write lines while
Mishka’s jazz permeates
in this old insipid raft
Where books
congregate like gamblers
and grow oversized feet
knotted with mine.



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The following comments are for "In this insipid place"
by Shakti

feet...
Very nice use of double entendre, (oversized feet), as in poetry as well as the human apendages.

I like the expression of books congregating like gamblers...I imagine a bunch of bored, almost well-dressed hob-nobbers standing around in that insipid (smoke filled) bookie's office, waiting for a good game to come along.

Very well penned,

Now, about Mishka's jazz....it wasn't really jazz, it was some form of interpretation of what almost passes for music, but not really.......

Just kidding, don't want to go down the wrong road here.

Nice work

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: May 29, 2011 )

Shakti and Mishka
Shakti,
I thought Mishka was a reggae artist?

I'm trying to figure out, "insipid raft"..a raft lacking flavour?..a dull raft?

again, imagery galore



( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: May 29, 2011 )

herrdom2
Ok, now pay attention.
Thisw is my left foot,
The other is my right foot.

( Posted by: veebdosa [Member] On: May 30, 2011 )

of Mishka
Thanks for the comments...Its been awhile since I came back from hibernation and one thing i definitely miss here in LIT.ORG is the amazing 'reactions' writers give. You always manage to give me that 'step-back' into my writing and see it through someone's eyes. More than anything, you make poetry and words alive for me. Sometimes, the words are all that matter when things and pieces are unhinged...:)

PS I think we are not talking about thesame MIshka...she is a local artist and one that I recently listens to.

( Posted by: Shakti [Member] On: May 30, 2011 )





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