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[A JDY 55-word flash fiction entry inspired by Dave Moore's "Can You?" challenge and by a 1982 hit song by "Horse & Oats." And, by God, this intro is more than half the total length of the story below. Dang!]


Night remained throughout the terrifying ordeal of three careless missionaries caught by Mandingus pygmies. Trembling, they sweat rivers.

"Deliver us, Lord!"

Drums boomed. Oversized kettles boiled.

To thundrous cheers the chief surveyed the catch of these elderly men.

"Go in peace. No return!"

The tribesmen's yells stilled in shock.


"Cannibals need meat, not gristle."

Copyright 2011 James D. Young

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The following comments are for "Can You?"
by JamesYoung

I'm a little confused as to what this is. Is it an entry or something else?

Its an entertaining little piece whatever the case may be. I enjoyed!


( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: May 7, 2011 )

heh heh
Those pesky missionaries who spend too much time doing good deeds and not enough time lazing around .... not appetizing at all.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: May 7, 2011 )

Condensed Version
Dave: You said 500 words or less. Thought I'd drop in my agent's 10% version, one of those 55-worders. Is it an entry? Sure, if you want it to be. If not, looks as if I have some 445 words left to do another...

Pen: All that fastin' & abstainin'. The pygmies certainly erred with those emaciated zealots. But had it been a longer story, I may have had the chief ask why they didn't capture someone like Kirstie A. An abundant feast for all! - Jim

( Posted by: JamesYoung [Member] On: May 7, 2011 )

food for thought
Funny one.

Fasting and abstaining makes those missionaries an ill meal!

Looking forward to seeing the other 445 words!


( Posted by: sandra [Member] On: May 8, 2011 )

I don't know if I could tell a story in so few words and make it stick like you did. I wasn't expecting to laugh and I love being taken by surprise.

Are you going to hit us with the other 445? I excited to see it if you do.

Much Love,


( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: May 8, 2011 )

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