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Thought I would give poetry a try. Let me know what you think.

Doesn’t it make you sad?
It should really break your heart.
Watching everything we had, decay and fall apart.

Doesn’t it make you just want to cry?
Watching our hope die.
As all the love we tried to make, drowns in a sea of hate.

Old arguments not solved.
Buried issues not resolved.
Our differences grow wide.
I know I tried to hide.

We tried so hard to deny the truth
Both of us struggling not to quit.
Now, though, all our fights seem moot.
It should make you sad…doesn’t it?

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The following comments are for "Doesn't It?"
by wrath186

Great Stuff
You've got a knack wrath. Keep up the good work. Makes me wonder what or who this is about to inspire such strong emotions...

( Posted by: Dolphingurrl [Member] On: July 22, 2003 )

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