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Mortality insults you,
for you are a god
amongst mere mortals.
In my mind,
your feet don't touch the ground.
Your splendor, intensified
by your graciousness,
shines like the sun;
almost too brilliantly to behold.
The thought of you
fills my entire being
with a torrent of emotion.
and images
conjured up from deep within
my soul.
They possess me
in warm waves
of torrid desire;
hearts beating in unison
to a symphony of ecstasy;
throbbing, pulsating rhythms
filled with passion,
and pleasure.
Indelible prints
on my mind's eye
never to materialize
in tangible reality;
which sadly,
could only serve to defile
the foundation of your sanctity.
An ethical conundrum;
I simply can't have my cake,
and eat it too!


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The following comments are for "Angel"
by Muddybraun

How intense
... and beautiful. The astounding thing to me is that I could not point to a particular image and say, "this is what makes this poem work." Rather it is a subtle cumulative effect of your words and the genuine emotion behind them that informs my soul to your passion. This is mature writing that does not rely on tricks, or witty figures of speech. (that being said, I did especially like the line: "An ethical conundrum," for how it makes my tongue dance)

( Posted by: poeteye [Member] On: April 25, 2011 )

I am pleased that you enjoyed my poem, and that you took the time to tell me so. I was hoping that the emotion and passion would come through clearly, but subtly...and make your tongue dance!

( Posted by: MuddyBraun [Member] On: May 5, 2011 )

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