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florid
frayed
breast
beat
passion
played


cosmos
crossed
freed
froze
tantric
tossed


flying
foiled
dreamt
dread
chillin'
coiled


heaven
hexed
bright
burst
peace
perplexed




August 10, 2005
modified to form
April 6, 2011

a gyrated genetics/convoluted development production

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below the subliminal
deep within manipulation
that's where tr^th resides

2 Dec 2011






























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The following comments are for "parallel posting (multiple mind)"
by Bobby7L

Doing Math
Lucie,
interesting take/transliteration..

emotional complexes..micro to macro

of self..
as well as Man.

geometric..

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 7, 2011 )

I am a man of few words and not by choice
micro but still, for me, a prodigious offering. Robert, this is bad ass!

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: April 7, 2011 )

Abel's take
Abel,
We each have our method(s) of/for expression. We are an eclectic lot.

Thank you

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 7, 2011 )

Bobby
This one set my MPs to cheering...Everyone of them love you...Kacee and many others

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: April 7, 2011 )

Kacee's take(s)
Kacee,
Does an offering display qualities of having a unique point of view? Is it highly derivative, or does it offer unique qualities of originality and creativitiy. Is it new/fresh, in its representation?

Creating, at times, while experimenting, doesn't always result in a medallion level offering, but we can at least say we try.

{smiling}

Thank you

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 7, 2011 )

eh?
Robert, sometimes you frustrate me beyond words. I will read your micro offerings and am left dumb - but not from an "I got it" point of view; I am speechless because I just don't. Of course, I could always take the subjective approach or I could just do the facebook generalization of "I love it," "you're brilliant, Robert" but that isn't me. I want to embrace what I read. I want to get inside the author's head.

Now, I'm sure this goes without explaining, but none of the above is meant to be disrepectful or rude - I have too much admiration for you to ever do that. What it is meant to convey is exactly what I spelled out.

Care to enlighten me? And, for the record, I rarely ever read comments before posting. Have yet to read'em.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: April 7, 2011 )

Francisco.."chillin'..
..coiled"

Francisco,
When you are "chillin'"..you are relaxed, in a comfort zone..hangin'out..

When you are "coiled"..you are defensive, tangled, withdrawn..not relaxed.

on one level, a compressed representation of self/Man..in conflict..in struggle with self and each other

"peace/perplexed"

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 7, 2011 )

Holophrastic
Francisco,
This would be an example.

Like when a toddler says, "Milk!"

The toddler is conveying, "Hey, I really like milk.".."I want some milk..bring me some milk!"

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 8, 2011 )

Milk!
Your explanation of boiling down your ideas to one word is great. I have a 15 year old toddler who still uses the one word thought explosion.

In sympathy with Toscano, I've had many 2 or 3 minute conversations with my son while he explains why yelling "Door!" is easier than using a sentence, and I try to figure out what he wants.

If you were younger Bobby, and this wasn't written in 2005, I'd wonder if it was texting that had this influence on your thought processes.

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: April 9, 2011 )

Bobby's Dairy
how did I miss it?

You know what you have just done? You have poured a pleasant-feeling and reading balm all over my body after I have just finished nursing Gilkey and Dobie. It read and feels so perfect!


breast...passion...cosmos...tantric...flying...heaven...peace - the keywords of my favorite activities

The tempo is so tailor made for breastfeeding, latching and their whimpers of enjoying the eating experience! Yumm!

excellent job for someone who has never breastfed!

( Posted by: VickieSALT [Member] On: April 9, 2011 )

Philo and Victoria
Philo,
I've always been kin to compression. As for texting, I was indeed sending and receiving many back in 2005. Interesting take..
Thanks

Victoria,
I'm glad you enjoyed this. My next poem in line may well be of interest to you, as a mother..Stay tuned..

Thank you

See you @G's

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 9, 2011 )

minimum maximum
My take on this is the passion of Christ and Easter somewhat. I see conflict in you over Believing. There is enlightenment here for anyone who cares.

Personally, I've moved to loosely embrace Calvinism in the past few years. Makes way more sense to me.

Third stanza is most compelling and complex. Just my 1/2 ounce of silver.

Arigato, Robert.

charlie.

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: April 10, 2011 )

minimize verbiage
..maximize impact.
Charlie,
While open to transliteration, there is indeed a level referencing conflict within self.
grazie

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 10, 2011 )

finally ... back again
I knew this fellow .. Robert Wheeler Gibson and he and I used to play word games where we'd spar back and forth with same letter words until one of us would come up empty ... L was my favourite
he really was good at it and had a competitive nature so it came up even or with him in the lead which says a lot about his vocabulary. I'm not talking about simple words either ..

so .. that's where my mind went when I read these groupings .. wasn't able to reach any conclusions at all .. so I suppose it's all jazz to me.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: April 17, 2011 )

tantric tossed
Penelope,
..my holophrastic side

I put John Handy's "Hard Work" up on my Facebook page..Listen to it with a nice single malt. It's playing on the deck @ G's..

grazie

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 17, 2011 )

cross talk
is it jazz? just curious before I venture outside.....

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: April 17, 2011 )

mellow..
..it's smooth. Sunday brunch friendly..

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 17, 2011 )





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