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Prehensile mouth chews -
sounds like lame rhino in mud-
teeth glare jealousy

young, yet has jowls wrinkles,
sniffs rose, rhino-like – why? thinks
she's cuckolded wife.

(my sister in law is the only person in the world I can't stand)

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Good things wait for those who know what they are doing


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The following comments are for "Rhino. Sis-in-law."
by VickieSALT

rhino woman
The chances are slim that a random reader would know everything behind the SIL personality. I can picture or imagine her chewing being that disgusting, and you mentioning before that she walked in sinc with that disgusting sound. This is where I think that haikus are not the suitable artistic tool. I like the ending, which is my kind, haiku-like twist. Again, someone who is not in the know would just fly by the place. Maybe you have done an excellent haiku vignette (your own thing anyway) for me. Nice an concise way of indirect portrayal of her, and your inner state. I suspect that she has been stalking you, joined this site too, in the invisible mode and does this thing.

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: April 20, 2011 )

Languorously Linguistic
Sammie – it happened. And – that's why I am so relaxed, and suddenly not worried about her. I take it back, she is rather like a camel chewing cud. I guarantee you that she is totally alien to social engineering. Shambolic, scatterbrained, unfit, neurotic and superstitious, she could never manage passwords to her bank and shopping accounts. Suddenly I am really-really relaxed. No longer worried about being styled as a controlling sister. Saw her at a children's clinic. She wore fleecy ragtag grey, I wore kneehigh reds. Did I mention that it happened? That I got my lipstick wish? That I feel soo complete. Einat. That's all I can say. And the subject flies deliciously – from her to her. It was so vital to confess, and Micki does not believe me. So convenient. So - yea, I agree, I am such a \newbie/ to have written the haiku about her.

( Posted by: VickieSALT [Member] On: May 4, 2011 )





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