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I give my heart to the moon
still beating, perfect vitality
Fill my chest with the captured light
of her quicksilver smile.
I shed gravity's forgotten coat
on the first night of spring.

And how I soared,
mocking the stoic face




of brick and mortar.
How I despised the rooted
captivity of trees.
Carefree lover of the moon.



But she is capricious,
fickle as her changing face.
My abandon now reduced
to ashes on the breeze,
so I drift earthbound
a cast off handful of snow.

I will not curse the moon,
who turned her face from me.
No, I will heed her lessons
on the faithfulness
wood, seed, and stone.


------
Smile if you're stupid,
laugh if you understand.


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The following comments are for "I Gave My Heart to the Moon"
by Bartleby

huh?
This wasn't 'here' a few days ago .. was it? Did I miss it when I was going through the marquee?

You know what? This made me think of that special night a few days ago when the moon was over the top and closer to earth ..

Your skilled writing magnified the magic known as the moon.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: April 4, 2011 )

Bartleby's Luna
I almost missed this one.

"..a cast-off handful of snow." - cool

experience enjoyed

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 8, 2011 )

We Are the Founders of Fickle
The Moon is loyal
to my heart's affections...
I...am the capricious one

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: June 1, 2016 )





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