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If he didn't confess

to our weekend on Swan Lake

she would have been mine


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Good things wait for those who know what they are doing


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The following comments are for "If…his wife"
by VickieSALT

sans his confession
..without confession
Victoria,
Noted as being 6/7/5

senryupsyched

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 5, 2011 )

5, sir.
if =1
he =1
didn't =1
confess=2
5
?

thank you for your evaluation
also point me to the source of this senryupsyched buzzword

( Posted by: VickieSALT [Member] On: April 5, 2011 )

did-n't
did
did-n't

As for the made word: senryupsyched
That's mine.

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 5, 2011 )

Appalachian, did not.
From now on I'll use "dinnt"

( Posted by: VickieSALT [Member] On: April 5, 2011 )

confession time
How about

Had he not confessed

Thats 5 syllables. You're like a desperate housewife, ain't ya?

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: April 5, 2011 )

Tori math for Tosco
Yes - shameless - for anyone who can judge a woman by her haiku writing. I want to give you new syllables. I want to scream syllables I have never screamed before.

so it's only you who could do the haiku math:

Tori+A+B+C=5 syllables

I know that only you are the master of objectives and subjectives, adjectives and adverbs, and raunchy interjections.

Thank you darling.

( Posted by: VickieSALT [Member] On: April 6, 2011 )

Lesson for Tori
Sorry, Tori: I meant a SWINGERS club, and not to be involved with this BINGO club.

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: April 21, 2011 )





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