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He threw a baseball,
The game had just begun.
He threw a fastball,
That I wanted to hit
For a homerun.
He threw a fastball,
But, I was blinded by the sun.

He threw a fastball,
That was now headed for my head.
He threw a fastball,
And now my doctors tell me
That I would be better off dead.

He threw a fastball
And now I lie forever in bed.
He threw a fastball
And you don't know
How much I wish that
He threw a curveball, instead.

------
Ronald Peter Ciras


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The following comments are for "Baseball"
by moroccanron

Baseball!
Helmets don't protect as they should, I guess...

Even more tragic if the bases are loaded and nobody gets to walk home because the guy who got hit by the pitch is immobilized, or worse, unconscious...
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I loved the repetition of "he threw a fastball": it read like the motion of the fastball itself.

Thank you!
Lucie

( Posted by: windchime [Member] On: March 30, 2011 )

bringin' cheese
..the high hard one

"Play ball!"

Let's go PHILLIES!

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: March 30, 2011 )

great read!
Made me think of gladiators .. but then .. they knew they were fighting for their lives ...

thanks for this .. well written

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: March 31, 2011 )

baseballs
Powerful poetic use of metaphor and heartbreaking irony. Well done!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: March 31, 2011 )

opening day
a good (dark) ode to opening day baseball

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: March 31, 2011 )





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