intentional tense change I think....
Ah yes, the kiss lives on long after it is executed, and something you very skillfully point out by your changing tense. I see Bobby recognized your change in tense as well, but I think he missed why you did it.
I assume it was/is intentional, which would make this haiku a very skillfully written verse, if accidental, then I would have to agree with Bobby.
Great work, outstanding if intentional, just ok if accidental.
Posted by: veebdosa [Member] On: April 21, 2011
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