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spoken at birth
uttered through
mothers fangs

closer to earth
than blood

I writhe


to feed

forests and
rock beds
cradle me
when weary

pits of fire
fueled by
dead beasts
warm me through winters

hides of useless
shade me
during summers

I know there are

they can find me
day and night
beneath this pen

a monster
and poet

"Some people never go crazy. What truly horrible lives they must lead." Charles Bukowski

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The following comments are for "Monster, earthling and poet"
by pablowilliams

..Is there a "monster" which is not harmful/hurtful/destructive..?

a monster by degree..?

writ(h)e on

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: March 28, 2011 )

a bit superfluous
..or redundant, was closer to what I was thinking. biggie..After four or five readings, I'm getting comfortable with it..

I love the word "pernicious"..have a senryu-poem with it as title, in the Lit archives.

I read as, "'fueled' by dead beasts"..

"beneath this pen"..interesting POV

enjoyed experience

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: March 28, 2011 )

sublime and sordid
This well-crafted poem is sublime in its personal, sordid beauty. I like your insistence on short lines; That's a technique I'm come to revere highly myself over the years and readings of verse. also, personally(perhaps) we seem to have a bit in common, in certain aspects anyway. remember, we nearly always have duality: capacity for good and for evil, for movement in both directions and sundry other angles. in stanza 8, you might change "fuel by" to "fueled by," if I make a humble suggestion. :) your new literary friend, Sean Lawlor Nelson "All things have a place under the moon as well as the sun." - Elliott Smith, 'little one'

( Posted by: seanspacey [Member] On: October 11, 2014 )

Your feedback is appreciated. You caught a typo! Shame on me. Thanks for looking in.

I remain close by.

( Posted by: Pablowilliams [Member] On: October 12, 2014 )

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