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a/n: This poem has been on before, but I deleted it from the archive some time ago. I've decided it's time to bring it back. (at least this time it won't have any spelling errors, I hope) 
_Miscarriage of Justice_ 
Away in the darkness, a young mother cried; 
Alone in the gutter, her baby had died. 
The alley was dirty; there was grime on her skin; 
And through her torn clothing, her arms were too thin. 
On the main road nearby, her whimpers were heard, 
But people were busy; her cries were ignored. 
Her blood on the kerb mixed with the grime; 
It gave the appearance of a terrible crime. 
She was frightened and cold; too much so to run, 
She crouched there in misery, fear, and alone. 
She was found the next day, by a bored group of kids, 
Her body was dragged, and then punched and then kicked. 
The police, when they found her, had nothing to show: 
They took her away, and named her Jane Doe. 
But the death of a low-life in the back-alley wastes 
Didn't warrant the time to open a case. 
Meanwhile her parents are still searching today 
For the girl who just vanished after running away. 

Spudley Strikes Again

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The following comments are for "Miscarriage of Justice"
by Spudley

*is haunting you*
So negative and lovely. It's a well done poem in general, and the point is harshly given, but that is fitting given the nature of the point. If I were to suggest anything (after screwing up your nine average(sorry, but I tend to score low)), it would be an expansion. While it stands well enough as it is, if it indeed is more than just a simple poem, it needs more than just a simple delivery. well done, though.

( Posted by: Kitten Courna [Member] On: June 22, 2003 )

sad but true
I really like this poem it has a sad ring of truth to it, Shwoing just how pathetic we can be and how deperates others can get.

( Posted by: [Member] On: July 1, 2003 )

It's supposed to be "curb" (which is what us brits say instead of "sidewalk" *grin*).

(I've just double-checked, and 'kerb' is a valid alternate spelling, but 'curb' is what I meant, so you're right to be picky about that one :))

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: July 17, 2003 )

I think this is a very heartfelt poem. To me..i think it's kinda showed how things came round for her..abandoning her child and got beaten up by other children while her parents seacrh for her. Kinda like a vicious cycle. Gd poem! :)

( Posted by: ^white [Member] On: October 30, 2003 )

thanks ^white
White, thanks for the comments on this any the other poem; much appreciated. :)
(I'm glad you picked this one; it's always been one of my favorites from my own writing)

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: October 31, 2003 )

really well done, for a bummer. The last two lines don't let you get away.

( Posted by: johnlibertus [Member] On: November 5, 2003 )

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