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there is so much beauty when flesh collide
skin to skin touching
on a soft midsummer night
heads sprawled on silk pillowcases
slant beating of hearts
resonating as one
the moon-shaped metaphors
of partially-owned urges
remains as a steady balm
palms tighly clasped
united in a blasphemous
fetal-like bend

then there is that
kiss bestowed at the nape of the neck

how can i not miss you?

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The following comments are for "SPOONING"
by weepingwillow

Lucie Said It All, Again
And, again, I agree. The only word in it that i failed to grasp the intention of was blasphemous.

( Posted by: Poeteye [Member] On: March 27, 2011 )

"blasphemous" represents many adjectives and metaphors that would bloat the poem, - and make it too technical and immature. I read INTO it and love it.

( Posted by: VickieSALT [Member] On: March 30, 2011 )

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