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A/N: Aunt Bea has me feeling nostalgic and I was inspired to pull something of mine out of the archives and dust it off. This is the first poem I ever published on Lit.org and it has a very special place in my heart. It went through several revisions before becoming this finished product. Ken and Shannon were amazing in their wisdom and helped me out while I was work-shopping. I've always liked the idea of flitting scene to scene in a dream and I hope I have captured that here. Have a look and tell me what you think! You never know, fresh input may be able to make this even better. (I know, I know, its always "shades" of one color or another...)


I see you as you were
In shades of gray
Is the memory faded?
Silent actors,
On a black and white stage?

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The way we were
Under violet sky's
Glowing with sprinkled starlight
Ageless beauty in Selene's embrace
Helios’ ride breaks the spell

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In my head scattered thoughts
Trying to fit a script
Where nothing works
With the lines I wrote

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The play has changed
I was not told
The director laughs
Sends me to my place
With ignorance of the next act

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Garbed in motley
Waiting for show's start
A funny little scene
Backstage in my mind

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The curtain opens
I begin to dance
Like a marionette
On an old Italian stage

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My strings pull me
From pose to pose
In a dance of debauchery,
The crowd goes wild.

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Peace of mind is my illusion
The bait for the trap
A mirage of color
Just over the horizon

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Nothing between us
But the burning desert
Always so close
Yet just out of reach

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My finger tips sliding
Through waves of heat
The image vanishes
I am alone

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Thunderous applause
The curtain closing
My life is a play
In shades of gray


David Moore
August 24, 2009


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'But I don't want to go among mad people,' said Alice. 'Oh, you can't help that,' said the cat. 'We're all mad here.'
Lewis Carroll



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The following comments are for "Shades of Grey"
by HeRoCoMpLeX

hmmmm
Here I am wondering why you used 'grey' in the title and 'gray' in the poem. Don't know why but I like grey better. Just one of those things.

Loved the poem by the way. Lots of images and enjoyed the progression with the dashes between.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: March 16, 2011 )

@Pen
It was just a typo, I meant to use "grey" throughout. Thanks for the comment!

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: March 16, 2011 )

progression
..of compression
Dave,
As Penelope, I dig the imagery and flow.

Salute

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: March 16, 2011 )

Shades of gray/grey!
Beautiful imagery Dave...Like Pen...the only jarrying thing about this is the use of the spelling of grey!

Good Job!

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: March 17, 2011 )





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