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Mono-rhyme

Mono-rhyme is a poem in which all the lines have the same end rhyme.

This is a great style to learn the basics of rhyming. I call this style a vowel poem.

A E I O U – pick the vowel that will dictate the sound of your poem .


Warning: this style is quite grating and to some extremely annoying and noisy –

For my example I chose the ( I) sound- This poem has annoyed quite a few readers(especially Pen) but I love it… It’s a dizzy little poem….


(The Wings of a Fly)


Buzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz Zap


in the corner of my eye,
I see a fly, fly, buzzing by,
near to my eye, making me sigh
as it flies by, wings rushing towards the sky,
flying away from my eye,
soaring high for a fly

why oh why does it want to die,
flying so high in the sky,
does it cry for the other fly
that did die when it flew into my eye

I swatted that little black fly,
who flew in my eye,
that did defy and deny
her right to fly by buzzing by my eye,
causing the little fly to die,
never saying good-bye to you who flies
so high away from my eye towards the sky
crying for the little fly, who in suicide,
succeeded in her wish to die,
by flying in my eye

I sigh from the sty that's in my eye
from that fly who flew in my eye,
wondering why she wanted to die,
never hearing her cry,
for it was you that made her want to die,
by seeing through your lie
about an affair with another fly,
leaving her high and dry
to explode and die, in my teary eye

who do you cry for as you fly
towards the sky away from my accusing eye,
for your sin of deceit and lust
where my eye holds her remaining dust,
for it was not I who made her die,
it was you who led her in my eye,
you who were once a mighty fly,
turn away from the sky,
set your wings on downward path,
cleanse yourself from damnation's wrath,
now its time for you to die,
fly oh fly in my other eye,

I weep
as I wait for your reply

Buzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz plop









------
nature weeps, the devil sings
at man’s greed and pride
and what it brings

just lots of useless
little things…

"He was the brightest of all the stars
of heaven, and even ripped and torn
in half, he still shone with a fire of a
billion suns. With a mighty roar
and a Big Bang, he imploded and
exploded out of the nothingness; and
the flow of Time began.”


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The following comments are for "Poetry Basics - Mono-Rhyme"
by TheRedCockroach

"You"
Bob,
"You" came to mind..The girl referenced was the muse for a series of lyrics/songs I penned between 1999-2006.


You

I'm a dreamer, know which is too.
I've seen beauty, and helpless viewed.
Been there, past top, beyond askew.

I've slept with nines, aimed at them true.
Now, my single wish, snarled-down screwed,
What I just missed in this world- You.

If I found my way home, to rewalk avenues,
There's a couple things I'd redo;
Made all clear, in rearview.

If I sang my love song,
I'd sing it just for you.
And if this was my last day,
There's one thing I would do.
I'd tell you I loved you,
As if you never knew.

Now, I'm dreaming; frights, three or two.
I've lost beauty, post-life renewed.
Went way past top, sideways brand new.

I've used some nines; aimed- left them, true.
My only wish now, tangled-down blue,
What I most miss in this world- You.

If I had a way home, I'd rewalk avenues.
A few things I'd redo,
Are simply now reviewed.

If I played my love song,
I'd play it just for you.
And if it was my last day,
With final thing to do,
I'd tell you I loved you-
Just like you always knew.



January 27-28, 2006
Robert William Gaglione

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 3, 2011 )

i in the sky!

This creation should by all means soothe anyone with an ear for music –, your musical rhyme is a successful rhyme that transcends the linear, information media – by striking - onomatopoeically and onomatopoetically- the mixture that you also create from the outset - linguistic, stanzas and simultaneously associated images. Simply yummy: "ça me donne un délicieux sentiment d'assurance" - someone is feeling multidimensionally ! On behalf of my husband I thank you!

( Posted by: VickieSALT [Member] On: April 3, 2011 )

remote viewing
Victoria,
Lyric remains a fave form.

tante grazie

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 3, 2011 )

tarte
In Traviata there is that scene where she is reading the letter and the first thing she sings is "tarte" i.e., too late. Being the only opera I can stomach - because I like Neapolitan songs only. I've always thought she is saying that reading his letter is like having strawberry tarts. I am so optimistic!

I am even more so optimistic because that was the only thing I ever attended, sat, watched or discussed together with Teflon Sam's wife, the source for the Italian translation.

Afterwards we went for drinks, and I had Campari, didn't like it, then had a Lambrusco, felt very erotic, but the idea of a threesome for us was as far as ...a Sahara dune to a polar bear... or to my teddy bear...

where was I? -
"for your sin of deceit and lust" - I held on to my optimism, as long as...an "accusing eye" - such natural satellites! - it moves some people - to repent!

vvv\/vvv

( Posted by: VickieSALT [Member] On: April 3, 2011 )

the four R's
Reflection..Refraction..Regret..and Redemption

I'm pretty sure this is the only lyric (of 300+), where I've employed a mono-rhyme.



Bob,
Your article appears to have inspired a life-of-its-own thread. I apologize for its sideways spin.

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 3, 2011 )





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