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Pain is ostentatious
and rightfully so.
Piercing,searing,aching;
allowing you to know
that something is amiss
and something needs to go.
Playing with fire,
will get you burned.
Remembering the agony
is the lesson learned.
If we are wise
the first time is enough.
Others are stubborn,
recalcitrant, tough.
They will not be taught,
despite their lament.
Their hand on the ember,
refusing to repent,
or reevaluate
a way to escape
the impending peril
before it's too late.

------
Yetunde


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The following comments are for "hard-head"
by MuddyBraun

hard head
To true - we stay on a bad and rocky path because we know it well and fear a better one. Adroit, ease in penning and wonderful use of language - nicely done!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: March 9, 2011 )

not moved
..by sentiment

I like your use of "ostentatious."..personifying "Pain"

Imagine being given the name Pain..and the sort of person you might become..

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: March 10, 2011 )

ostentatious Pain
Catchy connection there. Lots to like in this poem. Subtle effortless rhymes which sort of creep up on this reader. Always enjoy that.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: March 10, 2011 )

Hard Headed
I loved this, the flow was perfect and the image was flawless. This was the first piece of yours I've read and am very impressed. I'm off to read some more of your work.

Much Love,

Dave

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLex [Member] On: March 13, 2011 )

Thank You
Thank you all for taking the time to read my work. I am honored and grateful that such gifted writers are able to see my work, and are kind enough to take the time to comment.
...Namaste

( Posted by: MuddyBraun [Member] On: March 22, 2011 )





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