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Triolet

Penelope introduced me to this form and after many false starts I came to love it Ö



TRIOLET
The Triolet is an eight-line poem, with two rhymes and two repeating lines. The opening line occurs three times in this form. The first line is repeated as the fourth and seventh lines, the second and eight lines are the same. Some minor variations are allowed within the repeating lines, since this may enhance the poetic effect of the triolet.

Example:


Fire in the hole
The devilís in my belly
Oh Sweet Lord ITS eating my soul
Fire in the hole
ITíS swallowing me whole
Save me Lord Iím no Machiavelli
Fire in the hole
The devilís in my belly


In my next example I put a triolet in the middle of my poem. I mixed three styles Ėan ethere,(if youíre a purist a countdown-countup) senryu (which I will get to later) and a triolet. It also gives the poem a cool shape if you center it-canít do this on lit...


(A Change of Rhythm)

Wait
Donít leave
Iím not dead
Not yet anyway
Do you have a light?
I can hear my heart beat
Slowing, groaning and moaning
I feel a chill turn up the heat
Stay awhile and watch me fade away
Put that cigarette out Iíve had enough

the cold hand of fate
a reaper comes for his prize
last rites of a fool

Oh Father wash away all my sin
give me that passport to heaven
Hell is not a place Iíd want to live in
Oh Father wash away all my sin
Please donít make that devil win
Fix fates dice to roll a halleluiah seven
Oh Father wash away all my sin
give me that passport to heaven

an intervention
contrition reaps a reward
born again to die

Time to walk that mile to the Promised Land
Father Confessor please take my hand
Hold me up and donít let me fall
Let me hear the sirens call
Now forever to sleep
As I take the leap
Into the night
To find light
My eyes
Close
















------
nature weeps, the devil sings
at manís greed and pride
and what it brings

just lots of useless
little thingsÖ

"He was the brightest of all the stars
of heaven, and even ripped and torn
in half, he still shone with a fire of a
billion suns. With a mighty roar
and a Big Bang, he imploded and
exploded out of the nothingness; and
the flow of Time began.Ē


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The following comments are for "Poetry Basics- Triolet"
by TheRedCockroach

Wow Bob!
A double header of poetic styles I LOVE! Okay .. I'm going to add my ideas about the triolet here .. I know you won't mind. How I see the triolet and how I usually use it is those times I want to pay tribute to a person. Flattering ones full of fondness for an individual who's charmed me.

I think, to begin, I'll post one I wrote recently for a certain CBC radio host who interviewed me about Zodiac Zoo.


SHERYL MacKAY

Sheryl MacKay is way past okay
Her voice enlightens and brightens
an early weekend radio buffet
Sheryl MacKay is way past okay
She made me feel giddy and gay
like one of BCís poet titans
Sheryl MacKay is way past okay
Her voice enlightens and brightens

NXNW Link

Author's Note:
Check out January 30th podcast for my CBC interview download!

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: March 7, 2011 )

Limerick Lady
At Majestic, where supple scribes dwell,
Linnie Red is the Limerick Lady.
She is the scarlet tressed Belle,
at Majestic, where supple scribes dwell.
She touts NASCAR as well
and links it to moonshine thatís shady.
At Majestic, where supple scribes dwell,
Linnie Red is the Limerick Lady.

Linnie Redís Limerick Article

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: March 8, 2011 )

The Red Cockroach
In our Ink Slingerís copious clan
weíre invested with one Red Cockroach.
He sometimes uses the Black Monk approach
in our Ink Slingerís copious clan.
With gruesome subjects he deploys ťlan.
Poetry basics heíll broach as a kind coach.
In our Ink Slingerís copious clan
weíre invested with one Red Cockroach.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: March 10, 2011 )

a cockroach reply
Pen

You made this fat cockroach blush- love these limericks-


my warmest

The black Monk (aka) Bob:)

( Posted by: TheRedCockRoach [Member] On: March 10, 2011 )

triolets triolets
Pen

I meant triolets- been working to many hours...although I do love those limericks


my warmest
bob

( Posted by: TheRedCockRoach [Member] On: March 10, 2011 )

@ Bob
My pleasure Bob. I'm not sure if I screwed up the Slinger's apostrophe placement. Neither looked wrong or right .. so .. I tossed a mental coin. I love this triolet style. It's a bit more complicated than it looks because of fitting the repeats in but it's as much fun as the Limericks. I think I'll use this spot for any other triolets I might write about LitOrg members.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: March 10, 2011 )

G's hot spot
LitOrg has a brand new do drop Inn
where word warriors can belt a few back.
Thanks to Bobby; we're ducking the flack.
LitOrg has a brand new do drop Inn
where libations aren't an unholy sin
and Comrades will cut us some slack.
LitOrg has a brand new do drop Inn
where word warriors can belt a few back.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: March 31, 2011 )

oops!
Forgot the link .. sheesh! Some advertiser I am!

Bobby's Bistro

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: March 31, 2011 )

Thanks Penelope
The place is getting busy. I better get back behind the bar.

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: March 31, 2011 )





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