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She'd claim I hold all the words
and delights when I string them
rescued pearls from my deepest heart, yet
she holds the verse my soul longs to hear.

She'd say I'm experienced
cocksure in my confidence
with her an aching hot house rose, yet
I'm virginal quivering as her lips shape my name.

She'd say I am her fortress
shelter against fear, steadfast
banishing the assaults of memory, yet
her regard lifts me above the fray.

She'd say I nourish her
my sun, soil, and rain coaxing her
to grow tall and bloom, yet
she raises me, Lazarus fresh from the grave.


------
Smile if you're stupid,
laugh if you understand.


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The following comments are for "Yet"
by Bartleby

FYI
Bart, just so you know because you might not see it as I do .. the font formatting in this poem has created viewing .. 'issues'.

The apostrophe comes across as three symbols which create a distraction. I believe Chrispian addressed this problem on another link. Hang on .. I think I know where so I'll post the link ..

MT Marshall - No Shame

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: March 7, 2011 )

Good for you, Bart!
It's a smart man who knows where his strength is coming from...and more inportantly...to acknowledge it to the world!

You two are indeed blessed!

Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: March 8, 2011 )

back again
How lovely to see this in the manner in which you meant it to be presented. I hoped you wouldn't mind me pointing out the formatting 'issues'. Thank you for addressing them so speedily.

Bart, I'll confess I usually don't care much for love poems. This one of yours is one of my exceptions and there's several reasons why.

You touch upon the earthy physical love but not too much to make it lascivious but enough to convey intimate sensuality. That's not easy to do so kudos for doing it so gracefully.

You reveal insecurities - personal weaknesses which are dismissed by your love.

What's most compelling about this poem is the recognition that true love is a mutual experience where both parties take an equal yet different role in sustaining it.

All in all .. a very worthy and wise write.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: March 8, 2011 )





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