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She was looking
For a stranger
To open up her heart,
All he had to be was
Big and strong,
And I thought that
I could play that part,
I was drinking whiskey,
She was drinking white wine,
We were both unemployed,
Always out of money
And time.

She was so attractive
And barely five feet tall.
She was drinking steady
And trying to make some sense
Of it all.
She had been a waitress,
A lawyer and a clerk.
I had been working construction
But, now I was out of work.
We were perfect strangers,
Just like everyone else,
Lonely and hurting,
Losing all sense of self.
To us, all that mattered was
Somehow getting to the end of the day,
That is why when we met each other,
We both had nothing to say.

As, we watched our lives fade away.
We fade away.

------
Ronald Peter Ciras


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The following comments are for "She was looking"
by moroccanron

chance meeting
Jeez .. I liked this .. it reads like a song .. nice!

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: March 2, 2011 )

Silent promise
like words left unspoken when everyone knows the game.

I think you could work on the flow and meter a little to make it a tighter poem, but the general theme is great subject for poety. Who hasn't been in that bar? I know I've spent time there.

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: March 2, 2011 )

Looking
Yes - a song. The meter is a problem as a poem - but as a song you could stretch and tag a great deal of the words- break it down in four line verse and add a refrain and you got a good one here.
Ken

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: March 5, 2011 )





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