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I had a little secret that I kept so long ago
It made me too ashamed
for anyone to know.
Beyond any doubt,
I didn't want him to know of my secret
that was not scheduled to come out.
If my relationship fell apart,
I didn't want to be blamed
For breaking anyone else's heart
in a rough time of distress.
Especially when I've experienced a crisis,
in the midst of a mess.
For my lacking impulsive actions
that caused temptation to occur
with a sudden, fatal attraction;
Leaving feelings of my past to transfer.

It would go on to be one of my biggest regrets
of what my past turned out to be
But, I know God paid all of my debts
for the reason my soul should be now free.

Now, I have to forgive myself of my sin
I've committed that had me unforgiven
during the time when God forgave me within.

I've had a little secret that I kept so long ago
It made me too ashamed
for anyone to know.
Beyond any doubt,
I didn't want him to know of my secret
that was not scheduled to come out.
If my relationship fell apart,
I didn't want to be blamed
For breaking anyone else's heart
in a rough time of distress.
Especially when I've experienced a crisis,
in the midst of a mess.
For my lacking impulsive actions
that caused temptation to occur
with a sudden, fatal attraction;
Leaving feelings of my past to transfer.

Everyone has spoken life in the midst of my birth
Now, I have to live on the legacy
Valuing myself for what I am worth
Not for other people's sake , just for me.

It was my little secret
Always , I would throw away the key
and keep it.
It became engraved and buried inside of me
so deep.
That your secret would always be safe with me to keep.



------
angellica marie shackelford


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The following comments are for "My Little Secret"
by sierrramarie

16 line repeat?
I believe this poem would benefit from having the repeat removed.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: March 2, 2011 )

hey
ok

( Posted by: sierrramarie [Member] On: March 3, 2011 )

hey
thanks for the heads up. I really apreciate that because I know it going to make me a much better writer than before.

( Posted by: sierrramarie [Member] On: March 3, 2011 )

Love the Familiar
I don't think I would remove the repeat, I do it a lot myself, not as many as 16 lines, but when it is as good as this, and the flow is as deep and good as this, then it is definitely worth repeating.

There are poets who just do not like repeats, and I swear I cannot figure out why, it is just another tool most good and successful poets do because it adds to the familiarity of thought, which in my own opinion, is a very good thing.

Some call it cliche, in a way, but all Madison Avenue copy writers well know the value of cliche and the familiar, and they use it in every advertisement/commercial we see on TV?

Why is this? Because it WORKS, because people love cliche and the familiar, it influences everything we do in life. EVERYTHING.

( Posted by: VeeBdosa [Member] On: March 6, 2011 )

confused?
sierramarie - don't be confused by the conflicting opinions. It's the way it is. The luxury of the author is they get to decide which opinion has merit in their mind. What I've done when this happens to me is check out the writers who have provided input and choose which one is a more comfortable fit. Of course it's easier to simply listen to praise but it doesn't help one improve.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: March 6, 2011 )

What???
Of course it's easier to simply listen to praise but it doesn't help one improve.

I certainly hope no one takes this statements to heart, Pen, because I certainly disagree with it in its entirity.
Praise is probably the main factor in determining the amount of effors writers put into their work.

And effort are omni-important. No amount of study will make anyone a great writer, as Hemingway himself stated many times, I do not read any other writers, though sometimes admit to doing so. (I lie.) I want to write like Hemingway, not any other writer.

Proof in the pudding I believe, and the secret to writing better is to writing more. That is the only secret. All of the rest is just raisens in the pudding.

But I have to meet a friend at ihop and am late, so more latyer.

Ron

( Posted by: veebdosa [Member] On: March 7, 2011 )





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