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Take us; Shallow horizon
Beguile our
ruffled grey
flat line sail

Chop our wave, spliced with
the blood pink Florida
sunshine and
run the sea air through our
veins and along the shore

Colour the Spanish land, with stalks
Large over grown Spring buds that scale
the Everglades and lead our desire
out to sea; Deep into
the dark Atlantic



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The following comments are for "Deep into the dark Atlantic"
by 0207070

into the dark..
I read as,

"flat-line" or "flatline"

"blood-pink"

"overgrown"

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 27, 2011 )

imagery
Quite a bit of vivid here .. Bobby's suggestions will refine your paint brush. Nice

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: February 28, 2011 )

Like
Have to say that I do like this one. A good read and look forward to reading more of your work.

( Posted by: literature [Member] On: March 2, 2011 )





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