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Almost everything
summons her, quick as a blink
and then I'm smiling

Savoring the taste,
each syllable of her name
a delicacy.

How does she reside
in the synchronicity
of migrating wings?

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Smile if you're stupid,
laugh if you understand.


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The following comments are for "Her Name on the Wing"
by Bartleby

beautiful
Can't find a thing wrong with this but .. hey .. you've been at this for quite some time. Longer than me I'd reckon. Nice to read you here again.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: February 28, 2011 )

Bart's Senryu.
See Bart...I told you, you could do it.
Great Senryu!!!

I hope this means you're back to stay...it's official...Lit is back, bigger and better than ever, and the "old folks" are indeed home!

Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: February 28, 2011 )

on the wing
Dude - very tight, clean, mind directing lucidity - very cool!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: March 5, 2011 )





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