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coyote rambles
patrols dark urban streets
howls aren't civilized

skunk waddles by trucks
evening perfume holds its breath
dreading drop dead stink

geese keep to the creek
water music muffles honks
squabbles are garbled

raccoons talking trash
plastic bins don't raise a din
heavy metal's out

a shudder of wings
one less bleak life on parade
was seen but not heard

one song bird warbles
blindfolded by the blackness
mellow malarkey


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"Tigers bloom where there's oodles of room." Zodiac Zoo


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The following comments are for "Night Moves - 6"
by Pen

nocturnal expressions
Penelope,
..an enjoyable read

cool poem..

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 28, 2011 )

Like 'em all
but #5 hits the spot for me. The shudder of wings combined with "life on parade" is great contrast and draws me to think of hearing the rustling of something in the bushes, then the flight of a bird I can only hear and not see. Except that is opposite of your last line, but still it makes sense to me.

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: February 28, 2011 )

perfume and night moves
Pen

exquisite- separably each piece is a fun read- weaved together they are a joy to behold-

my favorite is the skunk- I lived that one-

wonderful write


my warmest
bob

( Posted by: TheRedCockRoach [Member] On: February 28, 2011 )

thanks to all
These haiku on night moves are from nights working in the edgier [nature wise] part of the 'city'. A creek, skunks, raccoons, coyotes, geese .. you could hear it but seldom saw what you knew was going on. Biggest thrill for me was the barn owl. Wow .. what a spectacular bird.

I'm so happy you dropped by and shared my experience.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: March 1, 2011 )





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