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( I posted this under poetry even though it holds the tradition Haiku form; there are no references to nature. I am new to this style of writing and do not wish to dishonor it. Feedback welcomed- rather,'Help.')

Secret place

whispers and singing
a day spent in quietness
donít bother looking


"Some people never go crazy. What truly horrible lives they must lead." ó Charles Bukowski

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The following comments are for "Secret place"
by pablowilliams

in solitude
I enjoyed your senryupsyched offering.

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 22, 2011 )

Haiku vs. Senryu
Hi Pablo...enjoyed this one...however, it is not a Haiku, but a senryu.

The traditional Haiku form is 5-7-5...must be nature driven, telling a complete story in 3 lines.

Love Haiku and senryu's. Most Haiku offered here are usually Senryu's, but that I believe is because there is no catagory for them. Perhaps Chris can create a special sub title for them.

Keep 'em coming!


( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: February 23, 2011 )

Much help recieved
Thank you all for contributing to my sense of direction; this give me a bit more. I have also been reading up on both styles, and look forward to sharing a few more in the weeks to come.

Thanks again.

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: February 23, 2011 )

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