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Why arenít dreams as grainy
as the photos taken scores ago?
Why are they sharp as broken glass?
Water seeping in a fresh print
in mud that never dries
the faint smell a bitter taste.
The drops of rain never reach ground,
but run down my face and arms.
I see the bend in the trail
drawing me, impossibly strong
though I know what lies beyond.
The jungle too still.
Why arenít dreams grainy?

Al Zeller


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The following comments are for "Dreams again"
by r1067r

Al's "Dreams"
Did you mean "scores 'of years' ago?"

As offered, lines three through six form a grammatically challenged sentence.

'The jungle is still.' Is that what "lies beyond"..?

Why? Answer: Some are..

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 19, 2011 )

hmmm
from A Z bio:
Quote:
After technical writing and editing for more than 30 years, can I write for pleasure?


You most certainly can write for pleasure .. but a question pops into my mind .....
After technical writing and editing for more than 30 years isn't it easier to get the write .. right?

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: February 20, 2011 )

imagery
I love the imagery in this poem. Dreams really should be grainy and fade with time but you are right, they are as fresh and as painful as ever. Good poem

( Posted by: 0207070 [Member] On: February 20, 2011 )





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