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Someone slid on a razor
It hurt
Someone laughed
It hurt
Someone knew then turned away
It hurt
Someone saw me fade
It hurt
Still hurts.

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by Gordon

It hurt
"Someone knew then turned away" might be the hurt I felt most. It is one thing to be ignorant to someone's physical, emotional, spiritual pain but to know and turn away has to be the worst of all. Good write G.


( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: February 21, 2011 )

Say that again....
I like the use of repetition and pattern here. And given the subject matter it's more effective that just a poet being clever for cleverness' sake.

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: February 26, 2011 )

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