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Hedonic, hedonistic touch
Dictates the garments I like very much
Donít care Iím paying through the nose
When I purchase this my aura glows

Honey, I say, Iím simply divine
Any man I target will be mine
This is how I feed my soul
Shopping is my god, it makes me whole

I pound and I pound the unforgiving streets
Causing untold damage to my beautiful feet
All in search of the perfect garment
Forgetting my ability to pay the rent

I seek and I search to fill the void
Decisions, decisions, iPhone or Android?
A terrible curse this, selecting a store
In order to purchase. But fear not next week Iíll want more.

You may call me shallow and fickle
But my spending will ease the economic pickle
Brought about by greed and overspend.
Society is a vicious cycle that no one can mend.



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The following comments are for "There is a God"
by MattS

shop siren
I think this is a good read and I would have loved it if the ending was less preachy and more .. um ... sardonic .. witty .. which would have been more in keeping with the poem's flavour. When one uses words like fickle and pickle - void and Android it sends the message it's amusing .. with a kick.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: February 21, 2011 )

Thanks
Thanks Pen, I always value your feedback.

On reflection the ending is a bit weak.

( Posted by: MattS [Member] On: February 21, 2011 )

Shop till you drop
I have had this "ism" in the past... yeah did my share for the economy so to read it like this definitely put a smile on my face. Enjoyed the pace, message and your candor.

Much enjoyed!
Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: February 21, 2011 )

SHOPPING!
Boy...do I relate to this!

My kids threatned to put this on my tombstone...She died the way she lived...SHOPPING!!

Really enjoyed this one Matts!

Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: February 21, 2011 )

Cracking the Vicious Cycle
There is no mending...
the vicious cycle...
that breaking wouldn't fix

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: September 17, 2015 )





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